Luhv

From today onwards, my college has begun. So a chunk of time will be devoted to the studies, which for a change, are something that I would want to do, rather than have to. But fear not, I would continue updating but it would be very infrequent. Anyway, last night I couldn't sleep and how could I- I was used to waking up at 10 am since past 2 months and so in bed at 11.30 pm for the college at 7 am is just so difficult for my body clock. And in this way, this 55 fiction was born.
For the unenlightened, 55 fiction is a format of story-telling in which (c'mon, don't tell me you can't guess) the story is restricted to a mere 55 words. It has a theme, suspense and revelation in the end. Simple as it might sound, believe me, I couldn't, even though I was wanting to, find a satisfying one till yesterday. And thus my nib rested on my notebook at 1 am and 'Luhv' was born. So ladies and gentlemen, presenting-



Luhv



I fingered through her soft silky tresses. She looked into my eyes. The longing, the desire reflected in her profound-looking beads. She pulled me closer and linked me to her luscious lips. We kissed. Deeply. Gently, I pulled away from her and let my tongue caress her neck. “Ooh,” she purred. “You are just so good, Roshni.”


P.S. If the twist failed to take you aback, good for you. You are an ideal Indian post section 377 modification. If not, well, good for me!

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10 comments:

R3d said...

55 words?
pretty good.
nice twist.
if it wasn't been for the last line i would have definitely given a "sucks" rating.

Daone said...

@r3d: that's what 55 fiction is all about. last line twist.

Anonymous said...

was that a homosexual pair making love??
-anurag

Samadrita said...

Is Roshni your girlfriend's name or something? :P
You end up using that way too much in your stories.
Anyway good first attempt.The suspense element is kept intact.And btw as much as I support the Delhi High Court's verdict I still find the idea of gay sex a bit repulsive.Can't help it I guess!

Daone said...

@anonymous: yup. it was.
@sam: Lol! not the first time i have been posed this que. i have a strict policy of not answering personal questions here. but this one has quite an obvious answer- if she was my gf, would i make her a lesbian?!
i use nikhil coz i can connect to the name and roshni because i love the name.

Ki said...

NOT bad :D

Anonymous said...

ahem ahem.....ROSHNI...hmm

angel from heaven said...

Good catch line at the end turned a normal love story into something else!!!

Chatterbox said...

Good one!
55 fiction can be so much fun.

Keep writing!

Rishabh said...

*thumbs up*

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